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The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates new locations for three supermarkets, which
proposed
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are proposed
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 in Ellington city.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the map
consist
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consists
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 of a large residential
area
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, two industrial areas,
motorway
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a motorway
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,
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railway
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a railway
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, and
a
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the
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countryside
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.
Additionally
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, it has several facilities
such
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 as an airport and a small park. The population reached 120,000.
To begin
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 with,
motorway
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the motorway
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is start
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starts
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 from the bottom of the
area
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 and
across
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runs across
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 the largest industrial
area
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 and the
countryside
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ending
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, ending
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to
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at
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 the top of the
area
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. It is nearest to site B from
right
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the right
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 at the Northeast side of the map. The
railway
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also
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begin
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begins
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 from
South
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the southern
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 part to the
West
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western part
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 of the country.
According to
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 site A,
is
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it is
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 located in the residential
area
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 between
traffic-free
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a traffic-free
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 zone and close to the
railway
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. C supermarket proposed to be near
to
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apply
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the
railway
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 in the South of the
countryside
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. Notably, A and B sites are nearest to the airport facility, which is
at
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in
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 the Southeast
the
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of the
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countryside
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, railway, countryside with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proposed sites
  • supermarket
  • locations
  • central
  • outskirts
  • residential areas
  • transport hubs
  • proximity
  • major roads
  • landmarks
  • accessibility
  • competition
  • shopping district
  • industrial area
  • green spaces
  • logistic ease
  • isolated
  • densely populated
  • traffic
  • customer reach
  • expansion possibilities
  • accessibility
  • customer base
  • logistical convenience
  • recommend
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