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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
THE LINE GRAPH DEPICTS VARIATIONS THAT TOOK A CRIME IN THREE DIFFERENT PLACES IN NEWPORT CITY
CENTER BETWEEN
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 2003 AND 2012. FOR AN OVERVIEW, AT A GLANCE, IT IS TO BE NOTED THAT CAR
THEFT
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 CRIME IS QUITE POPULAR,
WHEREAS
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LEST
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LEAST
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 ONE IS
,
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THEFT
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FORM
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FROM
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THE
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 PERSON.
TO BEGIN
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 WITH, IN THE
BEGINING
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BEGINNING
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 THE BURGLARY CRIME
OCCURED NERALY
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OCCURRED NEARLY
 3500 INCIDENTS,
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HOWEVER
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THER
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THERE
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 WAS
AN
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 SUDDEN FALL FROM 2004 TO 2008, WHERE IT CROSSED THE CAR
THEFT
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 AND
FINALLY
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 REACHED
TO
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1000 IN THE YEAR 2012. THE SECOND MOST POPULAR WAS CAR
THEFT
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WHERE
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, WHERE
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 IT STARTED WITH NEARLY 2700
INCIDENT
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 AT FIRST AND
SHOWN
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SHOWED
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 A
VARITATIONS
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VARIATION
 FROM START TO END.
FURTHERMORE
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, ROBBERY INCREASED
STEADLY
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STEADILY
 ENTAIR SURVEY,
ALTHOUGH
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THEIR
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 WAS A DIP IN 2006
AFTER
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. AFTER
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THAT
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THAT,
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 IT INCREASED IN 2009
ABOUT
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words theft with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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