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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Write a letter to your local council complaining about the poor condition of the roads in your area

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction with the state of the roads in my neighbourhood. The poor condition has not only caused inconvenience but
also
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 posed serious safety risks.
To begin
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 with, the potholes and uneven surfaces on
the
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Maple Street and Oak Avenue require urgent attention. Even these roads are daily used by
hunderds
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hundreds
 of commuters, yet they have several cracks and broken patches. Many vehicles, including mine, have suffered damage
as a result
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.
Moreover
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, the lack of street lighting and drainage has made the situation far more frustrating. During heavy rains, waterlogging becomes unavoidable, making it extremely difficult for both drivers and
pedstrians
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pedestrians
 to navigate safely.
This
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 is particularly
in
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 night when visibility is already low. I would like to request you take appropriate actions to
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 the damaged areas and install adequate drainage systems. I
also
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 urge you to repair street lights, as
this
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 would significantly increase safety for both drivers and
pedstrians
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pedestrians
. I would appreciate your prompt attention to
this
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 urgent matter
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 and look forward to positive outcomes. Yours sincerely, Amarpreet Singh.

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grammar
Fix wrong spell and word forms. Use clear phrase: 'are used daily' or 'there are potholes.'
coherence
Try one idea per paragraph. Start with the main point, then add detail.
task
Add the exact roads and how you are hit by them, then ask for action now.
task
End with a clear ask and a line for when you want a reply.
grammar
Check each line for flow and grammar so the tone stays formal.
content
The letter shows why you feel and what you want.
content
Roads are named to show detail.
tone
The tone is respectful and formal.
format
It ends with a proper closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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