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Band 2

People nowadavs are trving to slow down and reverse the aging process. What are the benefits and drawbacks of postponing the aging process?

It is undeniable that with
the
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aging
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ageing
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,
people
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 tend to
do
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undergo
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lot
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a lot
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 of
high-costing
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 surgeries or implants to look younger, and putting themselves in a situation that will cost them
high
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a high
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 demand
of
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for
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 money to look like their
youngerself
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younger self
.
While
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,
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 some
people
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believes
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believe
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 that
aging
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ageing
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 is a normal process of
human
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humans
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,
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lot
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a lot
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of
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disagress
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disagree
 with that statement.
In
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benefit
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a benefit
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 point of view, doing
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this
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these
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implements
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implementations
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 will give that individual
high
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a high
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 boost of motivation and hope that life is not over for them, and there
is
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are
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 still
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lot
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a lot
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 of things out there
can
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that can
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 be achieved
when
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apply
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at that old age. It balances the mental health too, not letting the old
people
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 who have done
implements
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things
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 in order to
younger
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be younger
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, fall into a pit of depression and hopelessness.
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,
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lot
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a lot
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 of
people
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 truly
forgets
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forget
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 that
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the aging
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aging
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ageing
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 process is a part of our cycle and
like
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, like
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lot
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a lot
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 of animals in the habitat, all
people
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 will die.
Due to
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 that,
people
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forgets
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forget
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 the one important thing: death. With all
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this
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these
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 new faces, cosmetics, and more
people
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forgets
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forgetting
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 the time
that is
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 clocking and going to stop when we are at our
last
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capibility
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capability
.

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structure
Make a clear plan. Start with a short intro, then put the two sides in 2 body parts, and finish with a short end.
cohesion
Use one main idea in each part. Use simple join words like and, but, also to link ideas.
grammar
Check the grammar. Make verb and noun forms fit the sentence and be easy to read.
content
Add a small detail or example for each idea. This helps the reader see the point.
task
Keep on topic. Do not say much that is not about slowing aging.
content
The essay shows a view on both sides of the topic.
language
The words used are simple and easy to read.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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