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Band 4.5

You have recently migrated to another country. Now write a letter to your friend to describe your present life. In your letter, say: when you have moved to this country why you chose this country how things are now for you

Dear Iliana, I hope you are doing good, and are fit as
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. As
,
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 you are aware that I have recently moved to Canada, so I am writing
this
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 letter to give you an insight
about
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into
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 my life here. I moved to
this
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 country after getting married, as my husband was already living here. Not to forget that I always wanted to move to Canada for my career development. But, as my parents are very overprotective
for
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of
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 me, they did not want to send me alone, and decided to get me married to someone
,
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 who already lived here. I chose Canada because of the vast
amount
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number
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 of opportunities available here. You know that I have done my
Masters
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Master's
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 in Nursing, and
this
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 country always
welcome
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welcomes
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 healthcare professionals with open arms.
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, I decided
this
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 is the best place to take my career to
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the
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 next level.
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, I decided to move in with my husband here
,
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 so that I can kickstart my professional pursuit. At the beginning, things were a bit difficult, since I was trying to adapt to the culture and extreme weather conditions of the country. But now they are getting better
and
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, and
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 life is going on smoothly. I have been able to secure a job in the hospital here and
has
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have
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finally
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 been able to adjust to the conditions here. I hope someday you can visit me, and I can show you around. I miss you a lot and the beautiful
memeories
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memories
 that we have created are always close to my heart. I hope to see you soon. Warm regards Himani

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task response
Your letter has all the parts of the task. If you add a specific date of move, it will be even stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Some lines have more than one idea. Try to keep one big idea in each paragraph and use link words to show how ideas go together.
style
Friendly tone that suits a letter to a friend.
content
Clear reason for choosing Canada and the good news about a job.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunity
  • culture shock
  • adjustment
  • adventure
  • language barrier
  • bureaucracy
  • immigration process
  • exciting
  • challenging
  • networking
  • international community
  • integration
  • support system
  • job prospects
  • standard of living
  • multicultural
  • diverse
  • satisfying
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