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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some
people
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 argue that professionals, particularly doctors and engineers, should
work
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 mandatorily in a
country
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 where they did their internship,
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 others believe that they should have the freedom to choose their
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 environment.
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 some prefer to provide service to their fellow citizens because they find it fulfilling. In my opinion, I strongly agree that it is the person’s autonomy to
work
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 in another
country
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, especially in a place where the salary is reasonable.
This
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people
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 who
work
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 in another
country
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 have a better opportunity to practice their profession, as it offers them fair compensation, which cannot be acquired in the
country
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 where they did their training.
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, healthcare workers in the Philippines ,
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 as doctors and nurses, only receive a minimum wage , which does not reflect how intense it is to
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 in a hospital setting.
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 reason, they would rather pursue their job in a
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 where compensation is reasonable for the performance done.
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,
people
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 who remain working in their home
country
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 where they trained might have a purpose to serve their home
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 , and because of
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, they are comfortable working in a job
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.
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, some civil engineers, to be exact, known for building infrastructures
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 as bridges, roads, and private buildings, prefer to stay where they earned their degree. In that case, they understand where to access all the materials
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 and meet the regulatory standards.
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, seeing the outcome in a place where they usually operate could be an accomplishment and will satisfy their self-esteem. In conclusion,
people
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 might have differing opinions on whether working in the
country
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 of training should be mandatory. I strongly believe that professionals should be able to
work
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 independently in any part of the world, whether for a salary increase or more job opportunities.

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content
Add a balanced view of both sides with more facts, then state your own view clearly in one sentence.
structure
Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence that shows the main idea.
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Give more detail to each point. Explain why people move or stay, and give more real and simple examples.
language
Fix grammar and flow. Use short, plain sentences to help the reader understand.
language
Watch word use and spelling. Use common words and check forms.
content
The writer has a clear view in the end.
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There are two sides shown, not only one.
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A real example from the Philippines adds real life touch.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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