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The table below gives the information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005

The table below gives the information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005
The given diagram illustrates how much
tax
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collected
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was collected
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 in Sweden,
USA
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the USA
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, Korea, Japan,
Turkey
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and Turkey
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 for 1975, 1985, 1995,
2005
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and 2005
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years
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apply
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. It can be seen that the number of
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tax
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taxes
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 collected in five countries experienced a different trend for 4 years from 1975 and 2005. The amount of
tax
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 in Sweden for the highest.
Tax
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 collected in Japan has
second
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a second
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 growth.
Then
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, the remaining countries increased slightly during
this
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 period. In
term
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terms
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 of the percentages of
tax
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 collected in Swenden, there was a significant increase between 1975 and 2005 from about 46% to over 70,1%.Looking at the data for in USA, in
this
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 period, the number of
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tax
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taxes
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 collected rose steadily from 25,1% to 27,4%. Regarding these figures, there was a
jump
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substantial jump
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subtaintial
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apply
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from 15,1% to 27,3%.
In during
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During
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period
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the period
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, the amount of
tax
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 collected in Japan
growth
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grew
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 quickly between 15% and 32,1%. In Turkey, it
climb
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climbed
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 considerably from16,4% to 27,4%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tax with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • tax collection
  • percentage (%)
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • increase/decrease
  • economic impact
  • tax rates
  • comparative analysis
  • data interpretation
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