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The table below gives the information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005

The table below gives the information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005
The given table depicts the proportion of
tax
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 collected in Sweden,
USA
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the USA
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, Korea, Japan and Turkey over a period of 30 years from 1975 to 2005. As is shown by the graph, the percentage of
tax
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 collected experiences an upward trend with some fluctuations. The data of Sweden was
highest
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the highest
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, Japan was
second,
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other
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and other
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 countries maintained a slight increase. In Sweden,
The
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the
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 number of
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tax
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taxes
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 collected climbed considerably from 46% to 70,1% between 1975 and 2005. Regarding Japan, there was a moderate
grownth
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growth
 in the figures of
tax
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 collected from 15% in 1975 to 32,1% in 2005. In
USA
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the USA
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, the number of
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tax
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taxes
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 collected jumped slowly between 1975 and 2005 by 2,3%. In terms of Korea, there was a slight go up from 15,1% to 27,3% with some variation over 30 years. Talking about Turkey,
The
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 proportion of
tax
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 collected rose steadily from 16,4% to 27,4% between 1975 and 2005

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tax with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • tax collection
  • percentage (%)
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • increase/decrease
  • economic impact
  • tax rates
  • comparative analysis
  • data interpretation
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