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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map
show
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shows
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 two possible locations, S1 and S2
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accordingly
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, accordingly
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, for
construction
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the construction
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 of a new shopping mall in the
city
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 of Brandfield. The existing features of location include a golf course with
park
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a park
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, housing estates, a
city
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 centre,
as well as
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 a river, roads, a railway system, and an industrial estate.
Overall
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, both sites are strategically allocated
ner
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near
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transport
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the transport
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 network, but they differ in terms of proximity to residential areas, the downtown and other facilities.
While
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first
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the first
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 option is closer to
residential
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the residential
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 area and
central
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the central
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city
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,
second
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the second
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 site is located near the industrial zone and has better infrastructure
near by
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nearby
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. In detail, S1 is situated to the north, between the housing estate and the central area of the town. It lies just across the river and next to the railway line, making it
convinient
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convenient
 for citizens in the
northen
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northern
 and
cetral
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central
 part of the
city
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. Its closeness to the housing area makes it accessible to a large number of potential
shopers
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shoppers
.
On the other hand
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, S2 is positioned in the south-east,
adjacted
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adjacent
 to the industrial district. It is located near the southern road,
wich
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which
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 could
attreact
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attract
 visitors from outside.
However
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, it is far from
housing
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the housing
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 estate and golf course, meaning that residents and leisure guests may find it less
convinient
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convenient
 with S1.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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