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Writing Samples
Band 6

An annual event was recently held in your area. Now you want to write to the organizers of this event congratulating them on a successful production. Write a letter to the organizers. In your letter, give details of the event mention what you liked the most about the event make a polite criticism of something you thought could be improved

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to congratulate you and your team on successfully hosting
this
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 year's agricultural fair in Listowel, ON. Talking about the event, I think it was a great idea to extend the fair for 1 more day to celebrate its golden jubilee. As you know, the fair had many exciting things,
such
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 as
tractor
Correct article usage
a tractor
show examples
 rally in the town,
truck
Correct article usage
a truck
show examples
 pull, horse and sheep show.
However
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, the roller coaster ride got the most attraction. Among all the events of
this
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 fair, I really enjoyed the tractor pull show. I had never watched any exciting
compitition
Correct your spelling
competition
 like that before, as I attended the fair for the first time.
However
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, there were a lot of people gathered on the streets because of these events, and If there were enough sitting arrangements, they would have enjoyed it with convenience. Anyways, thank you so much for organizing
such
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 event and I look forward to be a part of it next year. Yours faithfully, Ketul Shah

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coherence
Try to keep one main idea in each paragraph and use linking words to join ideas.
grammar
Fix small spelling and grammar errors, like compitition, If, Anyways, and such an event.
grammar
Use one more day rather than '1 more day' and say 'an event' with 'a' or 'an'.
tone
Use a formal tone and avoid casual words like Anyways.
content
End with a short line that shows you may join again next year.
content
The letter gives clear praise and a set of details about the event.
tone
The letter uses a polite tone and proper sign-off.
balance
The writer adds both a compliment and a small area to improve.
content
The writer asks to take part next year.
structure
There is a clear aim to the letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • event
  • held
  • last
  • month
  • town
  • hall
  • market
  • show
  • acts
  • talks
  • visitors
  • staff
  • helpers
  • schedule
  • on time
  • clear
  • friendly
  • safe
  • good
  • variety
  • ages
  • signs
  • readable
  • seats
  • shade
  • queues
  • long
  • sound
  • food
  • drink
  • chairs
  • parking
  • thanks
  • thank
  • you
  • well
  • done
  • next
  • year
  • best
  • wishes
  • yours
  • sincerely
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