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Over-reliance on modern technology means that people are failing to learn, or are forgetting, many basic skills. “To what extent is this true? Are people becoming so reliant on modern technology that they are no longer able to do some things without it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is true that modern
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 has led many
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 to neglect basic
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 as navigation and mental calculation.
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 does not mean individuals are incapable of performing these tasks; rather, they prefer to prioritise efficiency and focus on developing more relevant modern abilities. On the one hand, over-reliance on
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 has reduced the use of several fundamental
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. Navigation is one clear example, as most
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 today rely on GPS applications like Google Maps
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 of reading paper maps or memorising routes.
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, arithmetic has lost importance in daily life. Even simple calculations,
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 as working out change in a shop, are often done with a calculator. Another area of concern is writing
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. With the rise of spell-check and autocorrect tools
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people
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 no longer pay close attention to spelling or grammar, which has led to a noticeable decline in writing accuracy among younger generations.
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 created new opportunities for learning and skill development. Digital literacy, coding, and online research are valuable abilities that are increasingly demanded in the modern workplace. In fact,
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 often improves productivity by making tasks quicker and easier.
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, household appliances
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 as washing machines save time and energy compared to manual labour, enabling
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 to focus on more meaningful activities.
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, it is natural that some older
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 become less
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 as society evolves. In conclusion,
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 dependence on modern devices, the
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 impact of
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 is positive, as it equips
people
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 with new competencies and allows them to live more efficient and enriched lives.

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task response
Make your view clear from the start and keep it in all parts.
task response
Give more real life examples to show how tech both helps and may take away some skills.
coherence cohesion
Use more linking words to move from one idea to the next.
coherence cohesion
Start each paragraph with a main idea sentence, then add details.
strength
Good balance of pro and con view.
strength
Clear links between ideas.
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Good flow in paragraphs.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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