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The table below gives the information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives the information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented table indicates the comparison of how much
tax
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collected
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was collected
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 in 5 countries over a period of 4 years from 1975 to 2005.
Overall
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, the highest Swedish
tax
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rates
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during
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were during
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4
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the 4
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years of
survey
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the survey
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. By
the
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apply
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contrast, the
tax
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rates
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 in other countries
has
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have
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 a difference over the years
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such
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, such
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 as
The
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the
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 USA, Japan, Korea and Turkey. In Sweden, the number of
tax
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rates
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 started at 46% units in
1975
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1975,
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then
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 rocketed sharply from 23,89 to 24% units in 2005. A similar change was seen in Japan for
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, which grew considerably about 17% from 15% to 32% between 1975 and 2005. In terms of the data for the other 3 countries. The USA’s
tax
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rates
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was
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were
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 about 25% in
1975
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1975,
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then
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 jumped slowly
in
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over
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 the
3
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next 3
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decades.
During
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In
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 the data of USA, the figures for Korea experienced a gradual
go up
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increase
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 in
tax
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 collection, rising from 15.1% to 27.3% .
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, Turkey’s
tax
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 rate
also
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 climbed from 16.4% in 1975 to 27.4% during the period in question.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tax, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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