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Band 4

Indıvıduals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the individuals
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individuals
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affect
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government
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 and large
companies
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 about improving the
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invironment
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environment
. I see that both of them had exchanged
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 the
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invironment
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environment
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deferent
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 way, and I agree with
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fackt
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fact
 that the
government
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it have
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 more
improving
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 to the
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invironment
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environment
. Firstvall , because that the
government
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 it is the main thing in any country's that who make it if it did any move
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 step will make a huge different ,
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 it was in the good and helping things or did a bad or any mistakes ,
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 why it is very important for king and buss to be carful when they make any new rules or any move , so basically I see that the
government
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 it is the first reason for any improving not only for environment but
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 for so many things an country's . In other hand we have large
companies
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 for me I see
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 the second effection to let the environment healing and upgrading , that because company's espachilly the big one have really controlling on people handilling with them fixing their propleps contacting as much of deference group of peoples ,
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 when they are make any move to improving world or their country's it is will had a big deferences and most of people will listening to them . In conclusion ,
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government
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also
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the
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huge
companies
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 have more
improving
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 in the
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invironment
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environment
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doesn't mean that individuals
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 making any
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, without them we will not
seeing
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 the
effiction
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effect
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the
government
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 and big
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task response
State a clear view on the issue at once and keep it in every part of the essay.
content
Make two or three clear points. Develop each with simple facts or tiny examples.
grammar
Use simple sentences with proper grammar. Check subject and verb, and plural forms.
coherence
Group your ideas in order: intro, 1st paragraph about government, 2nd about big firms, then a short conclusion.
idea
The writer shows a view that government and big firms can help.
structure
There is an overall plan with an intro and a conclusion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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