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The chart below gives information about how many European citizens of different age groups frequently went to the gym between 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how many European citizens of different age groups frequently went to the gym between 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart shows the frequency of going gym for European citizens in different
age
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groups
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 from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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,
people
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 who are below 33
years
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 old take the highest share over the period,
while
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 individuals who are over 44
years
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 old account for the lowest percentage. Looking at the
age
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groups
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 between 24 and 33
years
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 old, they occupied the largest part from 1990 to 2002. Notably, it shows a decreasing trend after 1994, but returns an increasing trend from 1998. The second highest
age
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 group is
people
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 aged 18 to 23
years
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 old, which shows a similar pattern to
people
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 aged 24 to 33
years
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 old.
However
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, these two
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groups
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 met at the crossing point in 2004 and 2008, respectively. The remaining
age
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groups
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 demonstrate a similar trend, and they increase gradually from 1990 to 1998. Yet they develop a diverged direction,
people
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 aged 34 to 43 rise steadily,
whereas
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 the other group remains roughly unchanged.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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