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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number ofnew shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number ofnew shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The line chart compares changes in the
numbers
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number
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 of shop openings and
closures
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 in a particular country from 2011 to 2018.
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, both closed
shops
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 and open
shops
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 showed
downward
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a downward
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tendency
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trend
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 over the period of eight
years
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. What's more, the
amount
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number
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 of new store openings
initially
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 exceeded that
out
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of
business
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out-of-business stores
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, but the situation was reversed in 2018. In 2011, there were over 8000
shops
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 opening
registering
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and registering
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 in the nation, where more than 6000 stores confronted the dilemma of
closures
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. In the next three
years
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, the figure for
closures
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 fluctuated between 7000 and 6000,
while
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 new stores experienced a sharp decline to nearly 4000 in 2012 before rising to 6000 in 2014, roughly the same as closure number. Notably, the figure for shuttered stores plunged to less than 1000 in 2015
,
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 meanwhile, a similar but slighter trend was
also
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 seen on new shop openings, which dropped to 4000. Over the next four
years
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, new
shops
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leveled
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levelled
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 off at 4000, until they fell to 3000 in 2018. In comparison,
closures
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 significantly rebounded from
its
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their
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 bottom to 5000 in 2016 and remained at that over the next three
years
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words closures, shops, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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