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In many parts of world there is continuos coverage of sport on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sport themselves. Discuss the view and give your own opinion.

Conditional approval is used for drugs targeting minor species,
such
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ferret
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ferrets
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,
rabbit
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rabbits
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, or hamsters. It
also
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 applies when the drug is used in
limited
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a limited
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 way, for major species,
for instance
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, alleviating
pain
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the pain
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 of bone cancer in dogs. The paper states that
,
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apply
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 the conditional approval is valid for one year. The company may renew the license on a yearly basis for a total of five years.
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 the FDA retains the right to reassess all necessary attachments at each renewal interval. Unlike fully approved drugs, the
extra label
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 use of conditionally approved drugs is no way allowed under any circumstances.

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task response
Show a clear view on the topic and give a few facts to back it. Start with your main idea and end with a short result.
coherence
Link your ideas with simple words like and, but, so. Use a short start and end line.
content
Stick to one main idea and add one or two easy examples for each idea.
information
The text gives facts about rules and time that show some knowledge.
tone
The tone is formal and the topic is clear.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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