Some believe that installing CCTVs in high crime areas will help to reduce crime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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believe that installing
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can reduce crime. In
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the advantages
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and disadvantages of
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opinion. There are a lot of
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these days
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it
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makes
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us safer
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can invade our privacy at the same time.
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, there are two advantages of installing
CCTV
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. It can protect us from several threats or crimes. If
people
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know they are being watched, they may not want to break the law.
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, thieves or robbers might stop their actions when they see a camera.
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,
CCTV
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recordings are useful for the police. They can find some suspects by checking
CCTV
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footage.
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makes it easier to solve cases and catch criminals.
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, there are
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some problems with
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.
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cameras cannot stop every crime. Some criminals wear masks or find places without cameras.
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it is difficult to keep our privacy safe.
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, there are some issues where
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's private lives were exposed by
CCTVs
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. For these reasons,
people
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are very worried about installing
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.
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, I think the advantage of
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is reducing some crimes
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while
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the disadvantage is violating our personal privacy.

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