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Band 2

Some people think that leaving their home country provides better opportunities for work or study while others think that is better to stay in their home country discuss both points of view and give your own opinion

In recent years, many people
living
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have left
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 their
country
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 because they think that working and
study
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studying
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 abroad is
easy
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easy,
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while
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 others think that
it’s
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 hard to leave
your
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their
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 motherland.
This
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 essay
discuss
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discusses
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 both perspectives and
give
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gives
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 my own opinion On the one hand, I agree with people
that
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who
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 think
it’s
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 easy to work and study abroad
on
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from
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 my point of view.
It’s
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 easy because abroad
give
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gives
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 more
chance
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chances
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 to work what you want and gives more money than
motherland
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the motherland
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. You can find jobs that in your own
country
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is not that much useful for the
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,
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country
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 and
study
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studying
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 abroad gives more
chance
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chances
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 to find
well pay
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well-paying
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job
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jobs
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 and international friends
that
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who
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 can teach you
different
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about different
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nationality
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nationalities
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 and languages
On the other hand
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, people think that
stay
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staying
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 in your own
country
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 is better because they have their
friend
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friends
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 and family
that
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who
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was
Verb problem
have been
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 with them since childhood
and
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, and
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it’s
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 safe to stay in your
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country
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own country
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 because no one will protect you like your own
country
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 and take care of you
To conclude
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 all the
it’s
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 better to stay in your own
country
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. My own opinion is to leave abroad and make
bright
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a bright
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 future.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear map: start with a short intro that shows your view, have two body parts for each side, then a clear ending that repeats your view.
content
In each body part, give one main idea and a simple reason to back it up.
coherence
The end should match the view you show at the start; do not change the side you take in the last line.
language
Use simple and correct grammar; fix common mistakes like run-on sentences and wrong verb forms.
content
Give one real or simple example to back up your point so the reader can see it.
task response
The essay tries to talk about both sides and give a view.
coherence
There is a clear intro and a clear ending at the end.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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