Some People believe that allowing children to make their own choice on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other People believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

IT IS INDISPUTABLE THAT MANY HUMANS THINK THAT LETTING THEIR

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DEAL WITH THEIR OWN NEEDS, LIKE FOOD OR CLOTHES, COULD END UP WITH A KID WHO ONLY CARES ABOUT HIMSELF.

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HOW IT'S SO IMPORTANT FOR

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TO DECIDE FOR THEIR OWN STUFF. IN

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WE WILL EXAMINE THE TOPIC FROM BOTH POINTS OF VIEW

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I WILL PRESENT MY OPINION.

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, LETTING

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DECIDE FOR THEMSELVES WOULD HELP THEM DISCOVER THEIR OWN PERSONALITY AND HELP THEM BE MORE RESPONSIBLE.

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, THE MORE AND MORE

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GET TO CHOOSE FOR THEMSELVES MAINLY EVERY DAY,

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WILL HELP THEM DISTINGUISH BETWEEN THE

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THAT THEY OWN AND THE

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THAT THEY DON’T,

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THAT THEY SHOULD TAKE CARE OF AND

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THAT THEY COULD THROW AWAY.

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, MY 7-YEAR-OLD LITTLE SISTER, WE HAVE BEEN TEACHING HER HOW TO TAKE CARE

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MAINTAIN THE DAMAGE THAT COULD HAPPEN TO HER TOYS AND

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. AFTER A YEAR OF

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DAILY HABIT, SHE WOULD NOT LEAVE FOR SCHOOL

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IS IN A

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MESS.

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SHE EVEN GOES TO SLEEP WITH HER STUFF READY FOR TOMORROW MORNING. SHE STARTED REMINDING ME EVERY TIME I FORGOT TO PACK HER LUNCH. SHE DOES NOT ALLOW ANYBODY TO GET INSIDE HER

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WITHOUT TAKING OFF THEIR DIRTY SHOES. AND

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EFFECT IS NOT ONLY FOR HER

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. SHE STARTED TO USE THE SAME METHOD FOR EVERY PLACE IN THE HOUSE. ANOTHER IMPORTANT ASPECT IS THAT PARENTS WILL BE MORE UNDERSTANDING

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THEIR

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’ SPECIAL CHOICES. A LOT OF MOTHERS CAN’T STAND THE IDEA OF

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REFUSING TO DO THE

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THAT THEY ARE ASKED FOR, THINKING THAT THEIR

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HATE THEIR TASTE IN FASHION, OR THAT THEY DO NOT KNOW HOW TO COOK. BUT IT IS JUST THAT

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LIKE TO FEEL POWERFUL IN THEIR EARLY DAYS. PARENTS KNOWING

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WILL MAKE IT SO MUCH EASIER TO DEAL WITH THEIR

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, AND THE KID WILL BE SO CONFIDENT.

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, MY LITTLE SISTER IS MY MOTHER’S FAVOURITE. SINCE SHE STARTED LEARNING HOW TO DEPEND ON HERSELF, MY MOM KNEW HER VERY WELL AND HOW TO DEAL WITH

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A PERSONALITY. AND THEIR BOND BECAME STRONGER. IN CONCLUSION,

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ISSUE IS COMPLEX AND DOES NOT HAVE A STRAIGHTFORWARD ANSWER.

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, I HOLD THE IDEA THAT

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COUNTING ON THEMSELVES HAS SO MANY ADVANTAGES THAN

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DISADVANTAGES.