many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today's world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

The role of
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in contemporary society is a subject of intense debate.
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they were once considered vital for entertainment and education,more and more people now argue that they are ethnically problematic.
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passage will show the significant issues associated with
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and give some alternatives to
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if they are closed.
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in
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already
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animals
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welfare and conservation ethics.The majority of them could be divided into three classifications.
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,the excessive protection of wild
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.Almost all of the
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were living in the wild before being
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in
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.They develop and improve their survival
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skills
during the process of prediction and self-preservation.
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,with the overprotection of humans,
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animals
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don't have worries surviving and
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lose their ability to adapt
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nature
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world.Second,psychological
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of
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.In order to ensure the safety of both
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humans
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and
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,
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are always set in
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.But apparently it's
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to limit
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some
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that should have run freely in the wilderness in
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a narrow place.Third,the alienation of zoo functions.Nowadays,a lot more
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aren't
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just want to protect,but
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getting
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benefits.As the commercial function of the zoo is getting stronger,the necessity of
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development is doubtful. If the zoo is going to be closed,there are still some alternatives.
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,wildlife
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sanctuaries
and
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natural
reserves offer a better
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choice
.Unlike
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,these facilities primarily rescue injured or abandoned
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and provide them a better place to rest with minimal human interaction.For pubic education,the VR technologies
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an innovative idea.In
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new era,we need high technologies
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education.
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,
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the government
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could support more in-situ conservation programmes
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by setting policies or investing,which is a more direct and effective way to ensure the survival of endangered species. All in all,
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were historically important,they have raised concerns in modern society.Without
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that
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should be taken into consideration seriously.By
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the
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they have
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and
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may have in future,and
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providing more alternatives can
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help.Society always
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to foster a better nature world.

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