It is sometimes suggested that primary school children should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals. Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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the children and be more of an issue, and
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the vegetables too. All though teaching
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how to be more of an aware person and owning things to care for, has it's advanages,
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, building new hobbies, learning new things like farming, and being more of a responsible man, carying all of
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in the wrong age can be devastating and break the back of those infants, like in Saudi in the year 1990,
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as farming and being more knowledgeable about animals which benift them in the long run, but effected the childhood they had, the responsiblity at a young age made them used of some acts from their peers. But sometimes some children, have been tought by the fathers, how to handle the assignments or chores, given by the parants before enrolling the kid to school, which can make those topics more intresting, either in school, or at home, and maybe build from these little habbits, a man who can build nations all togather,
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, are the only ones a think deserve
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type of teaching. For the
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to apply them properly, by the family
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teaching them gradually before school.

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