More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items with famous brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Lots of
people
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turn to pursue luxury
brands
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instead
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of only useful and affordable goods in
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daily life,
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as clothes、cars and other items.
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my perspective,
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phenomenon indicates the positive changes
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the
reason
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various. On the one hand,
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economic growth,
people
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not
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only satisfied with the existing lifestyle ,
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as eating、sleeping,but
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keen
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emotional value:showing the social status or
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making
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social contact. Under these
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,buying the famous
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is
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good choice to match them. If someone
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a BMW
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then
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people
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will consider that he is a wealthy
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people
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in China.
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always
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with
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enthusiasm and
friendly
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expecially
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especially
in the consuming place.
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, the famous
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always have
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unique
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characteristics
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, just like the good quality
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the clothes or the secret
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engine for the car.
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represents the taste for the
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quality when
people
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who getting wealthy. The famous
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also
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have the
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to research and
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more delicate and innovative
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commodities
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for their VIP
customs
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customers
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. These
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will advance the progress of
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human society,because lots of huge changes
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originate from
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daily life. As far as I am concerned,
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famous
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his it significant meaning for some
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it
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is no doubt that it has
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influence. But it
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the
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personal
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choice for maybe a small range
wealthy
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of wealthy
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people
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and some
people
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who
has
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have
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higher
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a higher
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quality
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of lift
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lift
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pursue
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task response
State a clear view in the first line and stay with it. Give 2 main reasons and finish with a short conclusion that links back to your view.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'but', and 'for example'. Give each paragraph one main idea and finish with a small tie to the last idea.
grammar
There are many word form and verb mistakes. Check subject-verb and noun forms, and use the simple past or present where needed.
structure
Use a clear plan: intro, two body paragraphs, and a short conclusion. Begin with your main view, then explain, then end with a closing sentence.
lexical resource
Use common, everyday words. Avoid phrases that are not easy. Try to keep 'significant', 'progress' or 'delicate' simple or replace them with 'big' and 'new'.
content
The writer shows a view and gives some reasons.
content
The use of a real life example (BMW) shows how brands can affect views.
content
Some attempt to compare sides is shown.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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