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Some people believe movie reviews are useful. Others argue the reviews may spoil the audience’s mindset before watching the movie. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Although
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 some
people
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 say, the commentator's reviews can influence audiences’ perspectives and likely distract their ideas, I firmly believe
movie
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 comments are quite helpful and can positively affect the film fans as the other group argues. In recent times, and as a statistical fact, the rate of film production has been sharply increased. Meanwhile,
people
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 are mainly busy with different things
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 as jobs and family issues. Generally, a
movie
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 review gives
people
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 an idea of what can be expected from a film before they spend their time and money on it.
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, it helps them decide whether to see the
movie
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 either in public places
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 as cinemas accompanying the family, wait for it to come out on DVD, or even skip it altogether.
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, some
people
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 strongly believe that reviews may influence audiences’ views before they deeply observe the whole
movie
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, and
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, the audiences’ mentalities might be misguided.
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, some items
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 as special features in filmmaking techniques or some significant plot points and twists cannot be described in
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 a critic’s comments and briefs, and a person merely as a review reader certainly loses the sense and all inspiring notions being created by the director.
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, movies are complicated to make and critics ought to criticize them right and should not be considered
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straightforward. In conclusion, considering the existence of some professional critics having reliable and trustworthy comments, supposedly a mild judgment would be achievable,
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, as I strongly believe it can be beneficial to save time and cost and will help
people
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 manage family delegations.

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grammar
Try to avoid minor grammatical errors, as they can sometimes slightly affect the clarity of your ideas. For example, 'as the other group argues' in the introduction could be rephrased for clarity. Moreover, 'critic's comments' should be 'critics' comments'.
examples
Aim to provide specific examples to support your points. Examples could help illustrate your arguments and make them more compelling.
transitions
Ensure smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs. This will enhance the logical flow and make it easier for readers to follow your arguments.
structure
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
balance
You addressed both views of the argument and provided your own opinion, which shows a balanced response.
relevance
The main points in your essay are relevant and well-supportive of your argument. You have made an effort to explain your ideas clearly.
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