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The diagram illustrates how the pineapples are cultivated and later processed into different types of products.

The diagram illustrates how the pineapples are cultivated and later processed into different types of products.
The diagram illustrates how the
pineapples
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 are cultivated and later processed into different types of products.
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, the process involves two stages, which are the cultivation of
pineapples
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 and processing them for various products, combining both agricultural and industrial techniques. In the first stage, pineapple
crowns
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 are planted under the sun at a temperature ranging from 23-30 degrees Celsius. A distance of 26cm is maintained between two nearby
crowns
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 to allow adequate space for growth. After seven months, the growing
crowns
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 are sprayed with
ethaline
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ethylene
 to help the fruits ripen evenly. Over the next five months,
pineapples
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 mature, reaching their optimal size of 30cm in height and 2kg in weight, at which point the fruits are ready for harvesting. The subsequent stage begins with the harvested
pineapples
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 being washed using specialised machines before being categorised by size. Both small and medium
pineapples
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 have the
crowns
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 removed first.
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 the former are chopped into pieces and placed into extractors to produce packaged juice, the latter are peeled and sliced or diced to make canned products for preservation. Large
pineapples
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 are waxed to enhance appearance
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 long-term storage, after which these fruits are loaded onto cargo ships for export.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapples, crowns with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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