The charts below give information about attendance and entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarize thew information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about attendance and entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarize thew information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below give information about attendance and entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarize thew information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows the number of people
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
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entered entertainment venues for sports,
theme
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parks
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and cinemas in 2009.
Additionally
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, the table lists the charges
of
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for
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entering these facilities per person.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the cinema, which charged the lowest prices among all options, had a higher number of
admission
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admissions
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,
while
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those which
asked
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charged
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for
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apply
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a higher fare had fewer enrollment
figure
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figures
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. Both the fee for a person or a family for going to the cinema is the lowest, charging $15 and $55 per individual or
family
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family,
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respectively. The attendance of cinemas
threefolded
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tripled
that of
theme
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parks
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, surpassing a total amount of 1 million tickets sold. For
sprots
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sports
and
theme
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parks
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,
however
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, a lower number of participants can be seen.
Both
Correct determiner usage
Neither
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numbers
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number
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did not
Verb problem
apply
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exceed
Wrong verb form
exceeded
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400
thousands
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thousand
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. Football games charged the highest among all given events (more than $70 per ticket),
following
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followed
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by
theme
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parks
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which charged $70
dollars
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apply
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per person.
Although
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basketball and cricket competitions
charged
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cost
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$34 and $24 respectively, these games are more expensive than going to the cinema.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words theme, parks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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