The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.

The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.
The two pie charts compare the main modes of transport used by people travelling to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.
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, there was a clear modal shift away from private
car
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use towards buses between 2004 and 2009.
Car
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usage fell sharply
while
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bus travel increased markedly; walking and cycling rose slightly,
whereas
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train use remained largely unchanged. In
2004
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2004,
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the
car
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was the dominant means of travel, accounting for 51% of journeys. Buses were used by 33% of people, making them the second most common option. Walking made up a small proportion at 4%, and the remaining 12% was shared between trains and bicycles. By
2009
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2009,
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the picture had changed considerably
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;
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car
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usage dropped to 28%, a fall of 23 percentage points,
while
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bus travel climbed to 46%, an increase of 13 points, becoming the most popular mode. Walking more than doubled to 9% (up 5 points), cycling rose slightly, and train figures showed little variation. These changes indicate a distinct movement toward public and active transport for university commutes.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • means of transport
  • commuting patterns
  • sustainable travel
  • urban congestion
  • public transportation
  • private vehicles
  • carpooling
  • urban infrastructure
  • environmental impact
  • modal shift
  • cyclists
  • pedestrians
  • traffic volume
  • ride-sharing
  • policy initiatives
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