Solving environmental problems should be the responsibility of an international organization rather than each national government. Do you agree or disagree
Nowadays a lot of
countries
suffer from environmental pollution. A crowd of people
think that international organizations must care about this
, while
I believe that this
problem should be solved by the government
of each country
in each country
respectively.
The first point is the skills of an international group
. It is obvious that only one
group
even full of people
can not protect the whole world. Actually, they already doing it. Because, all presidents of countries
are already in one
group
, which is called the government
. However
, they all doing it by themselves. Furthermore
, not all country
clear as others. For instance
, India has environmental issues. The main of this
is the amount of people
. India is in the top five dirty countries
. This
issue will be the responsibility of the international group
, only when all countries
are clear and can afford to give this
task from the national government
to the international organizations.
The second point is the changing any details of the country
. The reason for this
, putting all countries
in one
box. Obviously, if there is only one
group
of government
, then
the rules for people
will be similar. In contrast
, the mentality and traditions of countries
are not the same. For example
, the Japanese like to eat insects. While
the residents of countries
such
as Russia can not represent it. And there are a lot of other traditions. A simple example is Kazakh people
burn the grass to protect themselves from wolves. And there is any possibility of having restrictions for people
who like eating meat.
In conclusion, having everything mentioned up we can say that this
will be the worst and not the correct decision.Submitted by bizhanalikhan6 on
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clarity
Clarify your arguments further. Some points, such as the issue of environmental cleanliness with respect to India's population and the Kazakh tradition of burning grass, need more explanation to make their relevance clear.
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examples
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