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Recent research has confirmed that “human activity has become the greatest threat to plant and animal life". Why do you think this has happened? How can we reduce our impact on the natural world?

Recent studies illustrate that mankind activities have become the worst disaster to plant and animal life.
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 phenomenon
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 on nature. There are various reasons that lead to
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 conclusion.
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, our devastating deforestation problem is increasingly becoming worse. Nowadays, many forests have become 'bald' by human convention
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 interventions responsible for the loss of biodiversity.
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, in the
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 30 years,
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 phenomenon has been neglected,resulting in vast forests in many nations becoming deserts or being replaced by human infrastructure.
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,
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 are the main cause of global warming, which is the factor posing the highest threat level for all species. The crack in the ozone layer, which was caused by us, is responsible for detrimental damage
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 the destruction of forests and
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.
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, mankind is indeed the most dangerous threat to other
animals
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 and plants. Despite these circumstances, only
humans
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 can fix and tackle the crisis that we have made.
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 with ,giving back space and environment for the
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 to thrive. Many scientists and ecologists have suggested that they plant trees and recreate the old environment of a forest for
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 to live in ,using the remnants of the deforested jungle.
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, spreading awareness for individuals,
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 would make more people notice and take action or donate to replant the forest for the
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, a group called Africa Wildlife has become mainstream for spreading awareness and using the donated money to create values
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 as planting trees or feeding wild
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 . These solutions may not be flawless , but through time, they will mitigate the wounds that
humans
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 have made. In conclusion, the fact that
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 are the most dangerous threat to other species and plants has been confirmed, which makes me flabbergasted. In my point of view, the problems will not be wiped out in the near future , but will indubitably be mitigated if we take action to tackle the crisis.

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content
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grammar
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lexical resource
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task response
Start with a short intro that states the main idea, and finish with a short conclusion that repeats it.
structure
The essay has a clear topic and a plan.
vocabulary
It uses simple words and easy style.
content
It tries to give ideas on both problems and moves to fix them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • habitat destruction
  • biodiversity
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • overexploitation
  • renewable energy sources
  • sustainable agriculture
  • forestry
  • pollution controls
  • waste management
  • conservation efforts
  • protected areas
  • environmental contamination
  • sustainable lifestyles
  • policy changes
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