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Some peole believe that history has little to teach us about today while others think that the study of the past helps us to understand the present. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Nowadays, the study of the past has become a significant topic of debate. Some people argue that
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history is still an essential part
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, I would assert that learning about the past is more beneficial for understanding the present.
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 knowledge about old generations will not help them in the modern world.
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 students need to learn about AI and science
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 in order to prepare them for future careers.
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 climate change and space exploration
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 data and old events.
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, others prefer to understand more about the past events for several reasons.
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, learn about traditions, what they wore, and languages.
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, they want to learn from previous mistakes and avoid repeating them to be knowledgeable and make
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history has little support in modern technology;
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, I firmly believe that the past can
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planning
Make your main idea clear in the opening paragraph and restate it in the ending paragraph.
structure
Use one clear idea per paragraph and start with a topic sentence that states it.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple connectors like 'also', 'but', 'for example' to make flow smooth.
grammar
Keep grammar simple to avoid mistakes; use short, clear sentences and check subject-verb agreement.
content
Give specific and relevant examples to support your ideas and explain how they show your point.
structure
The essay has a clear stance and an attempt to discuss both sides.
content
There are introductory and concluding parts that frame the essay.
content
Some examples are used to back up ideas (AI, climate change).

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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