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The news media have too much influence on peoples lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Over the years, the influence of
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media
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 on society has been a topic of considerable debate.
While
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 some
people
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 believe that it provides essential benefits,
such
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 as quick access to global information and public awareness, others argue that it spreads misinformation and discourages independent thinking. I partially agree with the latter view, as the
media
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’s positive role in sharing information is often overshadowed by its tendency to promote bias and fear. One of the main advantages of modern
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media
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 is its ability to inform
people
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 quickly about important events around the world. Thanks to large and credible networks
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 as CNN and BBC, individuals can easily learn about global issues like climate change or natural disasters and make informed decisions that affect their lives.
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,
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 coverage can raise awareness of social issues.
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, when stories of assault or injustice are reported, they can prompt authorities to act and prevent similar incidents in the future. In
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 sense, the
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 plays a vital role in education and public safety.
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, the same reach that makes
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media
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 powerful can
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 make it dangerous. False or exaggerated reports can spread fear and panic among the public.
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, if a well-known network mistakenly reports a bomb threat,
people
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 are likely to believe it immediately, causing unnecessary alarm and even political instability.
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, the constant race to attract viewers sometimes leads journalists to
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 sensationalism over accuracy.
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,
people
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 become less critical of the information they consume and more vulnerable to manipulation, which undermines trust in journalism. In conclusion,
although
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 the
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 provides many benefits,
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 as raising awareness and connecting
people
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 globally, I believe its negative effects—particularly the spread of misinformation and the decline of public scepticism—are more harmful.
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, it is crucial for both journalists and audiences to approach
news
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 with responsibility and critical thinking.

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task response
Be sure your view is clear in the opening and stay with it in all paragraphs.
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Give more examples or facts to back up your points.
coherence cohesion
Use short, simple links to join ideas so the essay reads smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph and make each paragraph talk about it.
language
Check grammar and punctuation and keep sentences easy to read.
structure
Clear position and a structure that has intro, body, and conclusion.
content
Good use of examples to show effect of media.
task response
The text shows both sides and ends with a view.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • people
  • life
  • today
  • agree
  • disagree
  • extent
  • much
  • too
  • can
  • should
  • good
  • bad
  • help
  • harm
  • think
  • know
  • use
  • read
  • see
  • hear
  • true
  • false
  • fact
  • source
  • time
  • way
  • plan
  • care
  • share
  • learn
  • idea
  • change
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