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Band 7.5

Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

The development of social media platforms and technological advancements has made it easier for
people
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 to keep in touch.
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, many individuals now prefer to socialise online
instead
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 of through face-to-face
communication
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.
While
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 I consider
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 a positive trend, other factors should
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 be taken into account. On the one hand, online social
communication
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 allows
people
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 to stay connected easily, no matter where they are. Modern technology,
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 as video calls and messaging apps, helps individuals maintain
relationships
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 with family and friends who live far away. It has made global
communication
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 faster, cheaper, and more convenient than ever before.
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,
people
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 working abroad can call their families daily, which helps them feel emotionally close despite the distance. Some argue that digital contact is not as personal as face-to-face meetings, but its accessibility and speed make it an essential part of modern life.
On the other hand
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, relying too much on digital
communication
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 has several negative effects on real human
relationships
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 and emotional health. When
people
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 depend heavily on online interaction, they often lose the ability to communicate effectively in person. Online chats are usually brief and lack emotional depth, which can make
relationships
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 feel distant and impersonal.
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, friends who only talk through messaging apps may struggle to connect deeply or support each other emotionally when facing real-life problems. Over time, excessive online
communication
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 can weaken social skills, reduce empathy, and make
people
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 more dependent on technology for emotional satisfaction.
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,
while
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 digital
communication
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 has made staying in touch easier, it has
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 created emotional distance and weakened the quality of real social
relationships
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.

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task response
Be clear on your view at the start. Say if online talk is good or bad, and stick to that point in the essay.
coherence
Use clear order. Use words like 'first', 'next', 'also', 'then', 'finally' to show steps.
coherence
In the body, give one or two real examples for each point. It helps the reader see the point.
task response
End with a short wrap up. Restate your view and add a final idea.
lexical
Keep the words easy. Use common words only. Check that every sentence is easy to read.
idea
Shows two sides of the issue
content
Gives good examples
coherence
Has good links between parts

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social media platforms
  • online interactions
  • virtual communication
  • global community
  • interpersonal skills
  • digital divide
  • cyberspace
  • virtual presence
  • social networking
  • mental wellbeing
  • digital literacy
  • safe spaces
  • marginalized groups
  • face-to-face communication
  • socialisation
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