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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015
The line charts provide key information about the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in the UK, India, Eritrea, and Uruguay in the years ranging from 2005 to 2015. The units are measured in subscriptions of a hundred
people
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the first graph that
people
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 in the UK
had
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have
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remained
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maintained
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 stable usage for mobile phone subscriptions among a hundred
people
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.
Otherwise
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,
people
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 in Uruguay had a gradually increased usage years 2005 to 2013, after that, there was noted slight decrease between 2013 and 2015. In India, there was a noted sudden increase in 2009
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subsequently
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, there was
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase. Individuals in Ertarea did not use mobile phones.
According to
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 what is shown in the second graph,
people
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 in the UK had the highest number of users for a fixed telephone. After that,
people
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 in Uruguay took a second stage, nearly 33 users, and the number of
people
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 remained stable over the years. As we showed, Indian and Eritrean citizens had the same usage of fixed phones throughout the period from 2005 to 2015.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subscriptions
  • mobile phone
  • fixed phone
  • increase
  • significant
  • rise
  • stable
  • pronounced
  • contrast
  • decline
  • steadily
  • highest
  • gradual
  • dramatic
  • usage
  • general
  • surpass
  • end of the period
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