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Test 1: The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Test 1: The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps compare the floor plan of
state
Correct article usage
the state
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 library 20 years ago and the present look.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the library had undergone
a
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apply
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several changes within 20 years, with
thecnological
Correct your spelling
technological
 changes and
room
Use synonyms
 relocations to the other sides of the floor. In detail, the most noticeable change happened in the hall, with
demolish
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the demolition
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 of tables and chairs that welcomed people after the entrance. There was an enquiry desk for inquiries
such
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 as book returns and for buying tickets, shifted to a cafe. And information desk, self-service machines added
besides
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 the cafe,
also
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 non-fictional adult
books
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 replaced with adult fiction
books
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.
Additionally
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,
room
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 for the
child
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children's
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books
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 gave its place to the lecture
room
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.
On the other hand
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,
modernization
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modernisation
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 enforced the change of
reading
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the reading
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room
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 for newspapers and
magasines
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magazines
 to the computer
room
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.
Room
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 for video and computer games
on
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in
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 the left corner
in
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of
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 the map, changed slightly for the storytelling events with two added sofas and
fictional
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a fictional
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book shelf
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bookshelf
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 for children.
Moreover
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,
adult
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the adult
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 fiction
Use synonyms
books
Fix the agreement mistake
book
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 corner, replaced with
the
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apply
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books
Use synonyms
 from all genres after 20 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • significantly
  • expanded
  • restructured
  • sections
  • facilities
  • incorporated
  • digital catalogs
  • self-service kiosks
  • advanced computer facilities
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • transformative changes
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