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The table below shows the sales at a small resturant in a downtown business district

The table below shows the sales at a small resturant in a downtown business district
The table illustrates the total sales of the tiny restaurant in
a
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the
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center
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centre
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 of the commercial area.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the average
sale
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 of
lunch
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 is lower than dinner
,
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;
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furthermore
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furthermore,
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 the number
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of sale
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sale
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sales
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of
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on
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weekday
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weekdays
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 is busier
comparing
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compared
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 to during the
weekend
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.
To begin
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 with, the average of
lunch
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sale
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sales
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 is around $2000 per day,
in
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particular
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particular,
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 on Wednesday is the busiest day of the week
reaching
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, reaching
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to
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apply
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approximately $2,600.
While
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total
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the total
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sale
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 of
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weekend
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the weekend
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 drops down less than $2,000, especially on
Sunday
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Sunday,
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is
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are
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 not
popular
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as popular
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compare
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compared
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 to other days.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of
lunch
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selling
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sales
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 has more than doubled to around $4,000
among
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on
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weekday
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weekdays
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,
on
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and on
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Friday
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Friday,
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has
Verb problem
it reaches
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 a peak of total
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sale
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sales
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 over $4,300. Similar to
lunch
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 selling, on Sunday is
least
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the least
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 of
transection
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transactions
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 by $3,000. The most noticeable trend is during night
time
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, time
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being
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is
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 busier than day
time
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; time
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,
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furthermore
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apply
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the number of
customer
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customers
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of
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at
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weekend
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weekends
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 is much
more
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higher
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 than the average
of
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for
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weekend
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weekends
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sale, lunch, weekend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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