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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

These days, getting higher education is really important in different
countries
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 because they would like to find better career opportunities. It is said that some
people
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 think that all experts should work in a location where they learn their lessons.
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 others have another perspective, and they think all
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 should be free to choose their professional jobs. We cannot deny that being free to select the work’s location is better than compulsory work. On the one hand, there have been a lot of
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 who are interested in science. They would rather immigrate for higher education and improve their knowledge to expose themselves to a more academic environment.
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, they try to communicate with other professionals from other
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 to become informed about updated knowledge.
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, they can be more creative and successful in
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 way.
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, they can develop their professional lives by being free to choose their destination.
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, when
people
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 are free to work anywhere they like,
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 condition helps them to provide great situations for their own
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.
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, they can share their ideas with the scientist in their hometown.
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, not only can they earn much money, but they
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 help their home
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 to have access to updated knowledge.
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, when experts stay in the
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 where they were trained, they might have a chance to help their own
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’s
people
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. Because they were trained
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 their needs.
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, it is really critical to pay what they owe and fulfil
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 responsibility.
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, they can teach other students and invest in their own
country
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 to develop it more than before. In conclusion,
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 working in the motherland can be beneficial for
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,
traveling
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 to other
countries
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 can broaden their minds to find better solutions for all difficulties they face. I suggest that all specialists maintain their contact with their
countries
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 after migration to share more ideas with them.

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task response
Make your introduction clear by stating your view and the plan of your essay.
coherence
Give both sides in equal amount and add real or simple examples to support each view.
structure
Link ideas with better words and keep each paragraph on one idea.
grammar
Use short, simple sentences and check grammar to avoid mistakes.
conclusion
Finish with a strong conclusion that repeats your own view.
content
The essay tries to talk about both views and your own opinion.
coherence
There are some linking words that show sense of flow.
tone
The ending gives your own view.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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