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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Write a letter to your friend to ask him/her to develop a website for your business. In your letter – Give a brief description of the business – Mention what you’d like to be there on the website – Provide some ideas on use of images on the web site.

Dear Aman, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
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 letter to you to create a
website
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 for my business as you are quite
expert
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an expert
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 in
IT
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the IT
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 field. As you know, two months ago, I opened my own custom cake store
and
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, and
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 it's growing day by day.
In addition
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 to it, we
also
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 take
order
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orders
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 of muffins,
pastery
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pastries
. Now,
me
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apply
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and my sister
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my sister and
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 open are bakery with the help of family and friends. So, to get more and more customers and I want
from
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apply
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you to create a
website
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 for my business. In terms of
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website
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the website
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, please add all the details related to my business.
Firstly
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, add
location
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the location
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 of
plaza
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the plaza
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, so people can easily reach the location without any difficulties.
Secondly
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,
also
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 add some options for online orders
as well
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apply
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. In case of images, display the pictures of handmade cakes on the
website
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, as
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as
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so
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 people can acquire ideas about the designs. If you need
further
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 information, you can call me
any time
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anytime
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and
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, and
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 I hope you will create the
website
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 as soon as possible. Love, Harjeet kaur.

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task response
Start with a short aim in the first line. End with one clear ask for the site.
coherence
Put one idea in each paragraph and use small linking words like first, next, also, then.
grammar and style
Fix word use and grammar. Use present tense and polite tone.
content
Friendly tone and clear goal to build a site
content
Gives key details such as shop type and need for online order
format
Close with a way to reach you

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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