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Band 4

wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree.

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some
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are some
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countries
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who
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that
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 suffer from poverty and they can't help
themselvs
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themselves
, so
poeple
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people
believes
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believe
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 that richer
nations
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 must give them some
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assit
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assistance
 and
help
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help,
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wether
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whether
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 it's financial or even physical help. The essay
agree
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agrees
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 with the statement, because we are
human
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humans
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can
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who can
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 feel the same
,
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,
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this
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 help can
effect
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affect
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 them as they can get some other benefit from the country rather than money. To
beign
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begin
 with, emotions,
human
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humans
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 tend to have the
excat
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exact
fellings
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feelings
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such
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as happiens
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happiens
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happiness
 or
sandess
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sadness
, so
who
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those who
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rules
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rule
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 the
countries
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 are people who can see
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this
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these
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 disasters and feel the same pain as people
on
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in
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 those
nations
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. And by helping the
people
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people,
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 they can feel better as they
had
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have
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 done the right thing.
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 there
some
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have been some
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 disasters
happened
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apply
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in Africa
and
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, and
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 we have seen a lot of wealthy
countries
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 moving to help by providing different
things
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types
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 of
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assit
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assistance
.
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take advantege through
this
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 type of help, most of the
countries
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 prefer to help but, in the same time they take something with them as payback, sence all of those
nations
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 can't afford paying by cash they had to pay using different types, like,they might give them a land or even a farm to produce crops they need for their own country.
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addition
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addition,
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 there are things they can take
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for
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, for
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 instance, some
nations
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wanter
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want
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 or
nedded
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need
 expert
worker
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workers
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,
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apply
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 to develop and
imporve
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improve
 their country, so they can
had
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have
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 an easy agreement because they
had
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will
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 provide
for
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apply
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them the
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assit
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assistance
 they need. In conclusion, helping other
human
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humans
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 can
effect
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affect
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 us and even the government.
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However
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 some of them can use
this
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 and benefit from the
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assit
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assistance
 they have
give
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given
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.

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task
Say one clear view at the start and give proof with simple examples.
structure
Use a new paragraph for each idea and link ideas with simple words like first, also, but, in addition, finally.
cohesion
Make each idea easy to see as you go from one to the next.
content
The writer shows care for others and wants to help.
content
There are ideas on why helping is good.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Humanitarian relief
  • Infrastructure
  • Global solidarity
  • Disproportionately
  • External assistance
  • Rebuilding efforts
  • Disaster response
  • Investment in stability
  • Dependency theory
  • Responsible intervention
  • Paternalistic
  • Shared humanity
  • Sovereignty
  • Capabilities
  • Fatality rates
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