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Band 2.5

Some people believe that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many support
that
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the
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 idea which is
countries
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 must be self enough at
food
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 production
for feeding
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to feed
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 people who are living in
countries
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 and
countries
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 should use
least
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the least
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import
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import-intensive
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 ways
for reaching
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to reach
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food
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 supply. I agree with
this
Linking Words
 opinion, cause
of
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apply
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countires
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countries
 have to have balanced foreign trade. Usually
countries
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 have themself resources for producing foods opportunities. During
centuries
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centuries,
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 population moves are balanced by
varius
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various
 conditions. So that
countries
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 could feed themself population with grown
in
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within
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 their
boundries
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boundaries
herbs
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, herbs
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 , vegetables and
livestocks
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livestock
. It is suitable
that
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to
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feeding
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feed
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from
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on
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 local
food
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 resources for health, because human bodies
are
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have
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 evolved
same
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apply
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in climate conditions. Comparatively importing to feed
population
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the population
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 is
expevsive
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apply
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more
than
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expensive than
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 producing in
inland
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the inland
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 of a country.
Countries
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 have to have balanced
economics
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economic
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 components.
In
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For
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this
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reason
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reason,
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countries
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 must care about balanced import-export values. Being
dependant
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dependent
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of
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on
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 foreign
food
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 supplies
lead
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leads
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 to addiction
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to another
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another
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other
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countries
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countries'
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 exchanging
food
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 prices.
Linking Words
This
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These
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stuations
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situations
 could
effect
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affect
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 foreign deficiencies for a country.
Countries
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 must apply ways that import as much as possible. Some argued that
countries
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 could produce their
food
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 needs. Usually resources of
countries
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 are enough for
food
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 production
and
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, and
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 they have to have balanced
economics
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economies
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 so that less
apply
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is spent
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to
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on
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import
Fix the agreement mistake
imports
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 is suitable for
countries
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.

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structure
Work on a clear start in the first sentence. State your view and how far you agree. Then in the body give one main idea per paragraph and end with a short conclusion.
cohesion
Use simple links to connect ideas, like first, also, but, so. Make 4 clear paragraphs: intro, 2 body parts, and a short end.
content
Answers should be more full. Give reasons and show why you think them. If you can, add one or two small facts or examples from life.
strength
The writer shows a clear view that food self-sufficiency can be good.
strength
There are some reasons given about cost and not relying on other countries.
strength
There is a try to compare the two sides.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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