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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the U.K from January to June.

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the U.K from January to June.
The line graph illustrates the number of
questionaries
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questionnaires
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 for data at a tourism office in the United Kingdom
within
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over
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 six months. It is
crystall
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crystal
 clear that,
figure
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figures
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of
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for
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 “ in person” and “by letter/email” had experienced an increase
over
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apply
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throughout the period, apart from “by telephone”.
Telephone
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The telephone
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 method was the most
prefferd
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preferred
 in
initial
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the initial
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 months
,
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;
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however
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, requests in person had become more common in
ultimate
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the ultimate
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 stage. The rate of “by telephone” tactic in the
U.K
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U.K.
, which accounted for 900 in January, decreased to 800 in February
and
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, and
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 after subsequent months, the growth was seen in indication,
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further more
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apply
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it had risen to just under 1600 by June. The information of
letter
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the letter
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 method was merely under 800 in January, which stayed
moreless
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more or less
 the same in
next
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the next
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 month,
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however
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however,
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 it
was
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decrease
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decreased
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 to under 400 and stayed equal/(stand at the same) until June. The tactic of ‘in person’ was merely over 400 in January, it had
rised
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risen
 to 600 in one month
and
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, and
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 it had
boosted
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risen
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 to approximately 1900 by June.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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