Nowadays, a lot of people want to receive everything in a short amount of time. Why is this? Positive or a negative development?

In recent years, the majority of individuals are willing to attain everything immediately.
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from several concepts and misunderstandings that can be pernicious for
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. From my perspective, I undeniably believe that it is
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development. Because
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number of personalities which are considered
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. On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why
people
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want to receive almost everything in a
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period
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.
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, the growth of technology can impact
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people
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’s personalities. Namely high amount of communities keen on social media like contemporary lifestyles and
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atmosphere.
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, individuals want to achieve
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kinds of lives by scrolling reels
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on Instagram.
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, nowadays, the number of humans
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being impatience because of possessions a lot of opportunities.
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, if
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continue to achieve
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, they do not have the possibility to concentrate
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tiny steps in attaining goals.
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, as I consider that it can
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to some drawbacks.
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, many
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do not have the ability to feel gratification from their targets.
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, those who almost receive everything do not have a sense of pleasure.
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,
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who prefer to gain a lot of things
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feel pressure in developing their abilities. In conclusion, the development of digital media influence
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’s manners .
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can not achieve everything instantly in
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a competitive
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world. Everything has its own challenges.

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