Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the
sport
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world
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there is a very common and controversial topic about what would be more important for an
athlet
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athlete
be
sucessed
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succeed
, the mental or
psyhical
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physical
strength.
This
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essay will discuss both sides and give an opinion. Physical
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strenght
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strength
in a person doing sports is absolutely important,
specially
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in some
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cathegories
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categories
. A
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gymnast
needs a lot of
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strenght
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strength
to support his own weight during the
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acrobatics
, not only
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his arms and legs, but
in
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his whole body
like
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, like
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in the core, wrists, and even
need
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needs
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body
self consciouness
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self-consciousness
for balance,
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. A runner
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on
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the other hand, probably does not need his arms as much
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the
ginastic
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gymnastic
, but
a
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strong
muscle
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muscles
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leg
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legs
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,
ankle
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ankles
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, core and
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strenght
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strength
for
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speed would be
extremally
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necessary.
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, all the
strenth
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strength
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in the world could not make any difference if the person is not mentally ready and
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. The human
mind
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is complex and everyone carries
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numerous
thoughts, expectations, pressures, past traumas all the time going
throught
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through
the
mind
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. All of
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can lead
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a high level of anxiety or even a panic attack, and the athlete could not
perfom
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perform
anything properly. In my opinion, both physical and mental
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strenght
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strength
are important, but to achieve success, especially in a
high level
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competition,
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a
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good mental health is by far a real necessity. People with an
organized
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mind
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, who
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a
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good input and mental
strategies
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strategies,
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are able to
disconect
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disconnect
from everything from the outside and focus
in
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on
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the moment without any bad thoughts that could
interferate
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interfere
with the
perfom
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performance
. In conclusion,
workout
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working out
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to have the physical
strenghts
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strength
needed is important
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, but
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even
highly
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more
is
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important is
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to have your mental health
syncronized
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synchronised
with your body
as
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, as
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a strong
mind
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could be the key to
the
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success.

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task
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and restate it in the end.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and add linking words to show how ideas connect.
language
Fix common spelling and grammar errors. Use short, simple sentences when you can.
content
Add one or two exact examples to support a point and show why it matters.
content
The writer tries to cover both sides and give a clear opinion.
structure
There is a basic plan with introduction, body, and conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical conditioning
  • athleticism
  • physical training
  • muscle strength
  • mental resilience
  • psychological preparedness
  • mental toughness
  • confidence
  • precision
  • focus
  • mental strategies
  • mental fortitude
  • brute strength
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