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4. The environment problems facing today’s world are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situations. Government and large companies should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays , several
problems
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 in the
enviornment
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environment
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experiencing
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 are great , because the public should not do anything to solve
it
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them
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. I am not convinced that
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ordinary people have not
to
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come up with solutions in regard of
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environment
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environmental
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problems
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, the
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 main
reasons
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reason
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 is that the changes begin with the
citizens
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,
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. Furthermore
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furthermore
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 ,
problems
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such
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 as fishing , hunting rare animals , its caused by the people themselves . Every single shift
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begin
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begins
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 with
citizens
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, when
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. When
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the
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a
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 person becomes more aware
about
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 the
affects
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effects
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 caused by
his
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their
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 gender
toword
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on
 the
enviornment
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environment
, the changes will happen gradually
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for example
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country
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countries
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 experience a lot of
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environment
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environmental
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problems
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and
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, and
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 the rules
is
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are
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 not restricted
, how
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. How
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we will
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will we
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 solve the
problems
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,
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basically
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by the awareness of the
citizens
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 , as long as the country has mature
citizens
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 , you will overcome the
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environment
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environmental
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obstacles
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, whatever
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 it is .
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, habits
such
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 as fishing and hunting the rare animals
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contribute
 negatively and
effect
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affect
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 the
environment
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the
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 reason behind
this
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the
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human
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humans
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itself
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themselves
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,
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;
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additonally
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additionally
, the cause of the problem
,
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is the only one
can
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that can
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 solve it . In conclusion , the person
play
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plays
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 a crucial role in the
affects
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effects
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 on the
environment
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 ,
therefore
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 , we
cant
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can't
 neglect the importance of the person who causes the
problems
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 and resort to the governments and the successful companies to solve these issues .

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task
Your view on the topic is not clear. State whether you agree or disagree and to what extent, in one clear line.
structure
Make one idea in each paragraph. Start with a short intro and end with a short conclusion.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show how ideas fit, like and, but, because, for example.
coherence
Give one clear example for each point and explain it a little.
idea
The essay tries to talk about the role of citizens in solving problems.
content
There are mentions of real acts like fishing and hunting that affect nature.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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