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The map below shows 2 possible sites (S1 and S2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON.

The map below shows 2 possible sites (S1 and S2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON.
The map illustrates two potential places for building
supermarket
Correct article usage
a supermarket
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for
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in
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 Garlsdon town.
Overall
Linking Words
, both suitable sites are near to industrial
area
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 where
site
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 2 is
surounding
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surrounded
 by the
indrustry
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industry
 and
site
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 1 is
oustside
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outside
 of the industry.
However
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, both are
comperatively
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comparatively
 far from housing
place
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apply
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.
To begin
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 with,
site
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 1 is situated in
countryside
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a countryside
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area
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 and approximately 12
Km far
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km
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 from the
hindon
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Hindon
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 population. In
adition
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addition
, it is
in
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apply
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between
of
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apply
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the main roads and Rail line.
Although
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 it is a bit
far
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farther
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than
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from
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 the residential
area
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compare
Wrong verb form
compared
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 to
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the commertial
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commertial
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commercial
area
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.
All together
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Altogether
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, it is well
accessable
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accessible
 for ten thousand
resident
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residents
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 all around.
On the other hand
Linking Words
,
site
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 2 is located in the
center
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centre
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 of the town
Linking Words
Punctuation problem
, besides
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besides
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beside
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 the main roads
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 is connected
commertial
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commercial
 zone
as well as
Linking Words
countryside
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the countryside
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. To sum almost
it
Punctuation problem
, it
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 is easy access for 15,000 population and 16
Km far
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km
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 from the
prople
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people
 who
lives
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live
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 in
Barnsdon
Correct article usage
the Barnsdon
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area
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.

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