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The pie charts below show favorite social media channels from 2011 to 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show favorite social media channels from 2011 to 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts illustrate the popularity of social media channels in a particular country, over a 2-year
period
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, between 2011 and 2013.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Facebook used more,
while
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 Pinterest displayed a small number of users.
In addition
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, other apps were gradually expanded throughout the
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. Starting with Facebook, in the initial year it recorded 59% of the total
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however
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, it decreased by 10% points in a year, and in 2013, it made up 38%.
On the other hand
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, Pinterest started with only 5%, and in 2012, it represented only 6%.
At the end
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 of the
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, it finished with just 8%.
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, Twitter was the most used app
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 after Facebook. In 2011, it highlighted 21%, after a year, it grew slightly, accounting for 23%, and in 2013, with 25%.
According to
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 details, at the beginning of the
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, LinkedIn and Google+
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 demonstrated 10 and 5 per cent. Both trends saw an increase, by 2% and 5% points, and finished with 15% and 14%.

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