Nowadays, technology is being widely spread. In the following years, technology will totally replace the teacher role in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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in the
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technology
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more advanced. I disagree with
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can provide emotional
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which
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cannot. First of all,
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can give
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emotional
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in their study process. When
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encounter difficulties in their learning and they feel frustrated about that,
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can immediately instruct them, comfort them and give
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to them. It makes children
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more secure and less pressure after the comforting from
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London University, it indicated that emotional
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is really essential to the learners as they
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more motivated in their learning.
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cannot really replace the
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completely in the
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teachers
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are more effective in handling the
emergencies
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in the
classroom
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. It is often that
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will have some
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as
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sick, child
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water on the floor. It requires a quick reaction
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certain events in order to
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children and
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the lesson.
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with more experience
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can make a fast and accurate decision to handle the issues.
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like AI
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teachers
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not encounter these
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, so they may not be able to handle
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this
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cannot really replace the
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role
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completely in the
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, it is
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understood
that
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is useful in the
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is
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irreplaceable
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in the
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emotion
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given to
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by teachers
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teachers
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can easily handle
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emergencies
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in the
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Also
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is suggested that teachers can use
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in the lesson in order to facilitate their teaching.

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