Vaccinating children against preventable diseases is not only unnecessary but also dangerous. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

There is no denying the fact that many strange illnesses keep showing nowadays.
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some contend that vaccinating
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against preventable diseases is not only unnecessary but
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dangerous, there is
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an opposing argument.
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essay will discuss why I agree with the second notion.
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with,
it is clear that
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vaccines
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stop many serious diseases.
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, when
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are vaccinated,
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fewer of them might fall ill and fewer will need hospital care.
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means that more people will enjoy having a better, stable, and healthy life. Another point to consider is that
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are carefully tested and
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after they are used. It is possible to say that all of that
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done by experts, doctors, and scientists who are very professional in their fields. It is worth noting that
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are carried out under
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the governments
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governments
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support and care.
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shows that risks are mild and rare.
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,
although
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many people fear
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, many big studies point out that there is no link to harm.
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,
instead
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of being terrified of
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, they suggest it is best to consult a doctor and look at facts to know what you are injecting your body with, and to make sure
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be
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side effects in the future. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I tend to believe that vaccinating
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save
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lives,
prevent
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prevents
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diseases, and
protect
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protects
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our
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. It is important for the public to start educating themselves and be more aware of the benefits of vaccinating their
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. It is
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true that talking to physicians and
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them many questions about
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trend is essential to wipe out parents'
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. I believe that the good from
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far outweighs the risks.

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task
State your view very clear in the first part. Add one clear counter point and then give proof or fact to show why you disagree with the other view. Use simple facts or good examples to back your idea.
coherence
Make the idea flow easy. Use clear links between ideas. Start each paragraph with a main idea.
task
You take a clear view and you explain why.
coherence
You use good sign of order like To begin with and In conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • vaccines
  • get vaccines
  • shots
  • diseases
  • unnecessary
  • dangerous
  • safe
  • risk
  • side effect
  • serious
  • mild
  • rare
  • data
  • evidence
  • study
  • research
  • proof
  • protect
  • health
  • child
  • family
  • community
  • doctor
  • nurse
  • public health
  • school
  • rules
  • duty
  • choice
  • fact
  • reason
  • disagree
  • agree
  • therefore
  • because
  • however
  • but
  • so
  • overall
  • trust
  • explain
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