The table below gives information on visitor statistics for 1996,1998 and 2000 for various World Heritage sites in Australia.

The table below gives information on visitor statistics for 1996,1998 and 2000 for various World Heritage sites in Australia.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below gives information on visitor statistics for 1996,1998 and 2000 for various World Heritage sites in Australia.
The table chart illustrates information about tourists who visited World Heritage places in Australia in various years, including 1996, 1998, and 2000.  
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, it can be seen that the Great Barrier Reef is the most visited historical site among other places,
while
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the
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Macquarie Island is the least
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in the chart.  In detail,
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the table chart
the
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Great Barrier Reef is the most popular place visited by
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tourists
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, started its period by around 1,670,000 visitors and in the final year increased to 3,200,000.
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place followed closely by the Central Eastern Rainforest Reserve,
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however
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it shows a modest decrease from 810,000 to 770,000 throughout the period.
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, the Blue Mountains visitors rise slightly every two
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in Australia, reaching
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581,000 in 2000.  
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, what stands out is that the Shark Bay site's
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quantity climbed gradually to 102,000 and reached its peak visitors in 1998,
then
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sharply fell to 89,000 over the given period.
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, the Tasmania Wilderness reveals a slight
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,
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the Macquarie Island experienced dramatic fluctuations between 1996 and 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor
  • statistics
  • years
  • compare
  • contrast
  • increase
  • decrease
  • number
  • specific
  • reasons
  • factors
  • affect
  • location
  • accessibility
  • marketing
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • tourism
  • conservation
  • future
  • policies
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