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Writing Samples
Band 4

Access to clean water is basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

Clean
water
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 is
importnat
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important
 for
human
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humans
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, as it
the
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is the
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 main source of living, since we can'
t
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 live without
water
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some
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. Some
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people
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 have
suggest
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suggested
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 that it should be free for all
the
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apply
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homes. The essay
disagree
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disagrees
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 with the statement,
because of
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for
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 two main reasons
,
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:
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 one is that some
people
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 won'
t
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 use the
water
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 properly for what they need, second point is that you can provide some jobs throughout
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 process.
To begin
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 with, using
water
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 in a proper way, if we have given
people
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 the ability to have
water
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 as much as they want to,
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 they will start to
using
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 in
a
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apply
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large
quanties
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quantities
, and that could affect the
water
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 supply of the city. As
they
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they're
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 gonna take
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a beggier
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beggier propotion
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bigger proportion
, than what they really need,all of
this
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 would happen, because they won'
t
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 care about how much they will pay
at the end
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 of the month.
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, if they
will
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worry about how much
this
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 will
cost
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cost,
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 they will think twice before wasting any drop of
water
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.
Furthermore
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, we can create some jobs from providing some fees into
water
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 supplies around the city, the process of the
water
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 from the its main source until it reached your home and your sink it would take some time and effort, we won'
t
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 be able to notice it unless we work over there, and there is
people
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 will benefit from working in
this
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 places, for sure most of us can afford to pay for
water
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 or even cover that since it won'
t
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 cost that much.
and
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 I believe what we all of us is to have clean and it is easy to reach, and
this
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what
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is what
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 those companies provide. In conclusion, clean
water
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 is something we search for, but
also
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 we have to
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be greatful
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greatful
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grateful
 for
this
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 thing, and not waste it and
also
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 be
respective
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respectful
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for
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to
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who
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those who
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 help us
to
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apply
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bring
this
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water
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 into our homes.

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structure
Plan what you want to say before you write. Make a small plan with your view, two main points, and a short example for each.
content
Use clear ideas. Put two or three main reasons and explain them one by one.
language
Check grammar and spell words. Use easy form and keep one idea in one sentence.
content
You state your view clearly.
structure
There is a start, middle, and end in the essay.
content
You give ideas about waste and job too.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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