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The graph shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by different countries in tonnes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by different countries in tonnes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
The data illustrates the volume of
tea
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 and
coffee
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 imported by several nations in
tonnes
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.
Overall
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,
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UK
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the UK
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 imported a significantly larger amount of
tea
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 compared to the others,
while
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Canada
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 reported the lowest figure. Germany appeared to be a major consumer of both
tea
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 and
coffee
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, as there
was
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were
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 no
noticable
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noticeable
 differences between the two. More specifically, the amount of
tea
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 imported was particularly high in the
UK
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 and Germany
,
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;
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 the rest were around 20000
tonnes
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.
In contrast
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, whilst
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UK
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the UK
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 reached a highest number of 80000
tonnes
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,
Canada
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 only had 20000
which
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, which
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 as we can see that it had the
lower
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lowest
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 score for
tea
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.
US
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The US
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 and
Canada
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 had almost the same number
with
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, with
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 a bit difference, but all of them were in 20000
but
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, but
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US
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the US
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 slightly above.
On the other hand
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,
coffee
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 was between 30000 and 50000
amoung
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among
 all countries mentioned,
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UK
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the UK
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 scored 30000
which
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, which
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 was the lowest,
then
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 Germany had 50000
and
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, and
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 it is the highest.
However
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,
Coffee
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tonnes
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 are similar in
US
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the US
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 and
Canada
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, 40000 in
US
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the US
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 and slightly below
it
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that
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 in
Canada
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, tonnes, uk, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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