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The charts below give information about the electricity generation in two countries

The charts below give information about the electricity generation in two countries
The pie charts illustrate the distribution of
electricity
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 generation
sources
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 in Germany and France, and present the proportion of renewable
electricity
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 in 2009.
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, Germany generated a slightly higher total amount of
electricity
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 than France in total, and neither country generated
electricity
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 from geothermal power. In Germany, about 59.6% of
electricity
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 was generated from conventional thermal
sources
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, followed by nuclear at 23% and renewables at 17.4%. Among renewable
sources
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, biomass and wind had similar percentages at over 35% each.
By comparison
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, hydroelectric made up nearly half of that figure, at around 17.7%. Solar’s share only accounted for 6.1%, making it the smallest recorded. Turning to France, the majority of
sources
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 came from Nuclear, at 76%. Meanwhile, renewables contributed 13.7%, compared with that from conventional thermal at 10.3%. In terms of renewables,
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 nation focused mainly on hydroelectric, which produced more than four-fifths (80.5%).
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, wind and biomass represented smaller levels, at 10.5% and 8.1%, respectively.
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, a small minority of 0.9% was obtained from solar.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, sources with synonyms.
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