The graph below shows the hospital admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2018.

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among five European hospitals between 2004 and 2018.

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, Bardley, Adlin, and Stanton experienced growth,

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Oxley showed a downward trend. Looking in more detail, Bardley’s patient registrations increased by around 50 over eight years, peaking at more than 250 in 2012.

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it declined slightly afterwards to roughly 247 in 2016, it recovered to 270 in 2018.

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, Forthsmith

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remained relatively unchanged throughout the period, ranging from 180 to 225.

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at Oxley saw the highest figure in 2004, at approximately 240.

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, its total dropped to 170 in 2010, before falling gradually

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to just over 100 by the end of the period.

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, Adlin recorded little change from 2004 to 2010 at about 125, followed by a steady rise to reach 250 in 2018.

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Stanton

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consistently

had the fewest

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in general, it climbed from only 70 in 2004 to marginally over 250 in 2018, surpassing Oxley in the final year.

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The graph below shows the hospital admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2018.

Today more and more people want things instantly (e.g goods, service, news). Why is this? Is it positive or negative development?

Schools should only offer subjects that are beneficial to students’ future career success. Other subjects, such as music and sports, are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?